
“The can ran across the floor and ran into the pillow.”
Sometimes writers, in search of excitement, will spread modifiers throughout their sentence, like this:
“The can ran swiftly across the wood floor and ran head-first into the pillow.”
Snooze worthy. But punchier verbs work even better.
“The cat sprinted across the floor and collided with the pillow.”
See the difference? A strong verb has a way of including modifier-like qualities without adding more words.
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